Posted by GPP on September 10, 2003
In Reply to: Re: Help on phrase posted by EAH on September 10, 2003
: : "The smile on a happy Man "
: : there is this gentle man whose become a proud father and thats all about what I am trying to portray it..
: : how can I better frame it....
: One way is to describe the internal feeling a new parent may have, such as the overused "his heart swelled with pride".
: I suggest using stronger synonyms..."grin" instead of "smile"...and substituting a physical description that suggests his happiness:
: An inane/foolish grin spread across the face of the new father...gently cradling his first child/son/daughter.../
: as he gently held/touched ..../
: I have used / to designate possible alternatives. Chose one or the other.
": For "political correctness" use "their" rather than "his"."
Well, but certainly not in this instance. It's poor English, but "PC", to use "their" for the possessive case in referring to a single person OF UNKNOWN SEX. When we're talking about a "proud father", chances are we can make an assumption about his sex.